FlashFic: Too Much

JC Rosen's "Too Much" flash.

Photo by Michael Coté

Keh-tap! Keh-tap! Keh-tap! The sound hammered on his too-soft brain. He groaned and the tapping sound hesitated a second before continuing. He’d swear it was louder now. He got halfway to rolling over before catching himself on the edge of the sofa, perilously close to falling. Soft head. Sofa. Yeah, had too much again. Did he even go out this time? Didn’t matter.

The only thing that mattered was getting to the aspirin. Robin always put his stuff out on the kitchen table. He levered up and shambled to the kitchen, making old man sounds the whole way. Bless her, there they were: Rolaids, aspirin and a Coke. His remedy of choice.

The tapping continued in the living room as he waited for the goodies to do their stuff. The fact she typed while he was hungover and right next to the desk, that she didn’t even say good morning, confused him. It made his sore head hurt, so he ignored it all.

He stumbled up the stairs to the bathroom and took care of business, splashing water on his face after washing his hands. The soap made the cuts on his right hand sting. Cuts? The splashing helped. The aspirin was hitting his bloodstream, too. Yes, time for coffee. He shook the sting out of his hand as he went down the stairs. It was dreadfully quiet. No keh-tapping. Nothing. A note was propped up on the kitchen table, cliché though it was. She was never one for clichés. His stomach clenched when he picked it up.

A photo fell out. He gasped, turned it away, slowly turned it back. Robin’s pretty face, puffy and bruised. He looked between his scraped up knuckles and the photo of his battered lover. “No more,” the typed note read. “You went too far. Get help.” Not even her name, much less a “love, Robin.”

One of the bottles still held a couple fingers of bourbon. He downed them, deciding this earned him a drink or two.

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16 thoughts on “FlashFic: Too Much

  1. Tante Willemijn November 23, 2012 at 1:30 pm Reply

    Sad story. Very compelling. Love your flash-fics.

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    • JC Rosen November 24, 2012 at 9:27 am Reply

      Thanks so much. This is one of those stories which fell into my lap after I wrote the #storystarters for it. I love writing those prompts. I really appreciate your feedback.

      Take care,
      JC

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  2. PenguinOfTroy (@PenguinOfTroy) November 23, 2012 at 1:45 pm Reply

    Oh wow, that’s a heavy one. Unfortunately, all too true in many cases. Well done.

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    • JC Rosen November 24, 2012 at 9:30 am Reply

      Thank you, Troy. I wanted it to be simple lines and shadows, his realization a stark reality for a long moment. Even I wasn’t sure how it would go as it hovered.

      Take care,
      JC

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  3. Johanna Harness November 24, 2012 at 6:52 am Reply

    Timely reminder that the holidays are not a time of joy for everyone. Thanks for this, Jess.

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    • JC Rosen November 24, 2012 at 9:32 am Reply

      Hrmm, hadn’t even taken that into account, but you’re certainly right. Thanks for the headsup and for your encouragement.

      Take care,
      JC

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  4. MarcNash (@21stCscribe) November 24, 2012 at 10:06 am Reply

    Blacked out of love. Can’t really feel too sorry for this character, but you depicted it well

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    • JC Rosen November 25, 2012 at 5:30 am Reply

      If you asked him, I’m sure he’d say he was deserving of your pity, making him even less worthy of it. Thank you, Marc. It’s good to know it worked for you.

      Take care,
      JC

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  5. Tim VanSant (@TimVanSant) November 24, 2012 at 3:45 pm Reply

    What a thoroughly despicable character. Nicely done.

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    • JC Rosen November 25, 2012 at 5:35 am Reply

      I love that, Tim. As loathsome as he was, he had to show it rather than let me editorialize. I’m happy to hear it came through well. Thanks!

      Take care,
      JC

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  6. Dawn Huddlestone (@dawnhuddlestone) November 24, 2012 at 9:24 pm Reply

    Ugh. The last line clinched my dislike for this man. Painful story but well-written.

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    • JC Rosen November 25, 2012 at 5:39 am Reply

      Until I wrote that last bit, I wasn’t sure how the story would end. After reading what I’d written to that point, I knew he’d have no other response. Thank you, Dawn. I appreciate your comment.

      Take care,
      JC

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  7. John Ross Barnes November 25, 2012 at 4:33 pm Reply

    You really do get so much out of relatively few words.

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    • JC Rosen December 7, 2012 at 10:14 am Reply

      Thanks so much for the encouragement, John. I’m sorry I didn’t see this sooner. I’m sorry I took so long to reply. You rock, you know.

      Take care,
      JC

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  8. Icy Sedgwick December 2, 2012 at 12:11 pm Reply

    Very powerful stuff, Jess.

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    • JC Rosen December 7, 2012 at 10:12 am Reply

      Thank you, Icy. I do appreciate it. Apologies for the tardiness of my response.

      Take care,
      JC

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